Pretty Crazy

Just thought I'd tell you that this caught my attention. The description and feeling of it was amazing. I will read the next part for sure. Oh, one thing: What ...

Yeah, I agree this was even better than the last chapter. I could learn a thing or two from your writing style. The way you take an everyday object and ...

There is some incredible description going on here. The best I've read in a while, actually. The scene was very clear, thank you for that! I really think you should ...

Very interesting. :D There were one thing that struck me as a little cliche: I suppose I should start from the beginning It's your story, you don't have to get ...

Here I am (finally)! This is going to be blunt: I have no idea where the characters are. Everything else seems good, you have several good hooks going. But, your ...

I'm not going to go very in-depth here, but I thought I'd just say I liked it. You have a nice, simple yet clear writing style. And you did a ...

You have a very fascinating mystery going on here. Okay so this is what I understand: There's this thing that's controlling their thinking to make it seem like they want ...

This definitely has potential- but it needs a lot of work punctuation-wise. There are so many easy ways to tell where to start a new paragraph. I'll make a boring ...

Wow, I rarely read poetry but that was amazing! The imagery and rhyming were great. I could actually see the wild horses of the sea rearing up and spraying water ...

Sorry to say I didn't read the whole thing. It was way too long for my short attention span. Please break up the chapters into different topics. You get a ...

Wow it's been a while. I remembered this story and always will. But I was sure surprised to see a new chapter. Better late than never. You introduced a new ...

Okay I finally found a time to read this and get interested in this part. I wish I had read it earlier! This is very good. It's a nice change ...

I did fond the second part random. Who is this? Is it her older? There are two different kinds of first person POV. One where the narrator knows everything (unlimited), ...

Wow . . . the ending is incredible . . . JB wanted Liz back. And like the fool I was, I had just led her right into the lion’s ...

Hi, I shall review your story since you reviewed mine. :D You have a lot of sentences that could be shortened. It would make it easier to read if there ...